Midnight Deep

Asking for tokens which are nowhere to be found.

If the three swords are meant to have similar power, how come the Sword of Night can draw thousands of followers to it, yet the Sword of Day didn't do much of anything until Tiemuraz took it? How come you fail to wake up when trying to enter the door of a wrong alignment, yet it's fine for Tiemuraz to wield blades of opposite alignments? Similarly, how come it drains you to have the Sword of Dusk, yet Tiemuraz has two swords at once, and suffers few consequences?

Weird that finding a coil of rope (probably the most powerful mundane item in the gamebook) is as uneventful as simply entering a random cave and finding it unattended with no real choice involved besides going on the right route.

Even the stealth skill does not actually allow you to sneak up on the two raiders, or bypass the sleeping one? It does not protect you at 81 either?

Hector comes across somewhat less grateful than one is likely to be after having been rescued from their likely fate.

In 353, the goddess is on a balcony, and presumably stands a floor above you, yet still manages to touch your chin from that position? Does she have freakishly long arms?

336 and 267 doesn't change if you had already learnt from the Tinker that Varna is under siege?

If you get killed fighting the Marluk Queen, you may not get "you have been killed in combat" message, just nothing at all between the dice rolls and the comment box. She also appears immune to the Pike's impalement: while that could be intentional, I don't see any ref explicitly mentioning that?

I was also hoping Woodsman could allow you to fix the Lantern.

317 is such an anticlimactic instakill, it balances somewhere between awful and brilliant.

I wonder if there's a use for things like the Wolf Pelt, Frying Pan, Fish Hook or the Pewter Statue? Perhaps I might have seen those if I tried taking more routes in the final stretch, but as it was, I found the acceptable one quite quickly. (I also briefly wondered if a Fish Hook + a Rope would let you pull away Tiemuraz's Sword of Day, but once the LOTR twist emerged, that appeared irrelevant.)

30
"from it hang a vast, grotesque carpet"

81
"and you several of them are close enough"

87
"but without any really malice" + "wild out West, child" + " would want to be out in this weather" + "After a few hour's walk,"

89
"soothing the aches of your cuts and bruised."

93

"introducing you as a childhood friend comes to help." (who came to?) + "It was terrible" + "nowhere near enough to stop Tiemuraz's dastardly legions" + "although he's returned since then" + "a strong destiny ahead of you" (period.) + "bids you close your eyes." (to?)

95
"before starting awake" (startling?) + "are the Sun and the Moon" + "and you cannot fail" (period.) + " a small sharp edged" (sharp-edged?)


138
"Gioan the jovial fisherman's sun" + " For all you know his hoards may be nearby already."

143
" "You haven't changed" is his response." + "but we fear that the hoards are attacking" + "with an ebony black hilt" + "There are few houses which are still safe" + "a place to rest for the night" + "Agreeing that this sounds (like?) the best course of action"


148
"After an only an hour of travel," + "through the blasting rain as best you can,"

150
"Peacefully" is A BIT of a misnomer for that option. + "into the things needle-toothed mouth."

152 - weird paragraph break in the middle of a sentence?

161
"A long, whip thin shadow"

186
"You have lost your weapons.As you climb" + "I'm Grimoald" (punctuation).

218

"by the look of you" (punctuation) "And an able one by the look of it." (perhaps looks, in both cases?) + I can't offer it" + "damned be honest contract" (punctuation)

222
"Do you not understand? (missing quotation mark.)

233
"signs of a reason rockfall"

237
"Wedged into a lose space"

245

"The town Electors are beside themselves" (town's?)

"my companion, Yvet" (period.)

251
"will enter its final stage" + "be put to its purpose" + "to continue" + " and you see that, rather than pupils and irises, tiny starscapes peering at you from beneath his brows." (either "that" is unnecessary, or there's a word missing.) + "would be sad" + "to know"

253

" You affirm your determination to go (to?) the Shadnezzar ruins"

"does not commune with her worshippers lightly" + "must know you have a chance" + "get you out at dawn tomorrow" (periods.)

254
"you meet the things gaze" + "it lungs forward"

275

"his whip coiled around his waste,"

295 - another weird paragraph break.

320

"but their flesh... and its head"

353

"committed such an Evil," (is "an" necessary?)

+ "will know of the Sword of Dusk's location," (shouldn't it be present tense?) + although you must chose it" (period, and tense.)

""I am sorry, young warrior" + "I am sure he would be proud of you" + "a message I must carry to you" + "draw the evil-hearted to his side" + "none would come to dominate the world" + "the Sword of Night" + "tortured and barren" + "if Tiemuraz reunites all three blades" + is at stake" + "and he, too, will seek it out" (punctuation.)

366

"a large, cathedral like building." + "And the other, he is here?" (is he here?) + "Is this some sort of trap?" (a trap?) +"Now, chose a door" (choose?) + "The one you seek to destroy"

395

"a large hole turn out of its hull" (?)

425
Perhaps he will prove right in time. (be proven right?)

460
"you wipe their slimy grey blood of your sword" (besides the typo, there's also the matter of you potentially fighting this with a mace.

"she bid you follow a different Master"